オンライン英会話 2016.11.27

定期的にオンライン英会話でレッスンを受けています。

第215回のTOEICに向けて講師と一緒に問題を解いて、講師と競いながら楽しくレッスンをしていましたが、TOEICが終わった今、次に何をしようかと考えていました。

 

自分としてはライティングをもう少し改善したいので、ライティングにフォーカスしたレッスンを行うことにしました。

進め方としては講師がお題を出して、それについて自分の意見を書きます。

レッスン前までに自分の英文を講師に送付し、レッスン中に添削をしてもらっています。

 

今回は初めてなので、あんまりきれいな英文ではないですが、以下のお題で英文を書いてみました。

 


お題:What do you think about nuclear plants in Japan?

 

私の英文(まずはオリジナルです。)

 

There are many aspects to consider, but  I’d like to focus on its financial aspect.
Personally, I was for the nuclear power, but now I’m against because of its shut-down cost.
Stable power supply by nuclear power plants had been supporting the economical growth after ww2 in Japan where there are little natural resources. Japan’s government encouraged to build nuclear power plants because it was consider as cheap and reliable power. This worked well and Japan enjoyed its benefit  until the earthquake in 2011.
After the incident at Fukushima, everyone realized how difficult to handle the nuclear materials. Even just shutting down cost was estimated at some billion dollars initially. But now the estimation is 10 to 20 billion dollars. The nuclear power is no longer cheap and reliable.
This is the reason why I’m against the nuclear power

以下の赤字は講師の訂正箇所です。

There are many aspects to consider, but  I’d like to focus on its financial aspect.
Personally, I was for the nuclear power operation, but now I’m against it because of its shut-down cost.
Stable power supply by nuclear power plants had been supporting the economical growth after ww2 in Japan where there are little natural resources. Japan’s government (Japanese governmentの方が自然だそうです。) encouraged the power company owners to build nuclear power plants because it they was were considered as cheap and reliable source of power. This worked well and Japan enjoyed its benefit  until the earthquake in 2011.
After the incident at Fukushima, everyone realized how difficult it was to handle the nuclear materials. (everyone realized the difficulty in handling nuclear materials.の方が個人的に好きです。) Even just shutting down cost was estimated at some billion dollars initially. But now the rough estimation estimate (estimationはプロセスだそうです。) is 10 to 20 billion dollars. (But now the ballpark figure is up to 20 billion dollars) The nuclear power is no longer cheap and reliable.
This is the reason why I’m against the nuclear power

原発についてはたくさんの意見があると思いますが、以上はあくまでも自分の意見で、私が知りうる範囲で書いたものです。
まぁこんな感じでライティングを磨いていけたらと思います。